"Here in California, the land of the free and the home of the mentally unbalanced, the quest for spiritual nirvana is widely recognized and accepted. Californians seem to love activities that incorporate tightening their buns with exploring their inner child."
Erica Haar
"Ga-Ga for Yoga"
This pair of sentences has the twin virtues of humor and solid construction. Yes, the first sentence does not benefit from the passive voice of "is widely recognized and accepted," and the "seem" in sentence two is unneccesary. But what kind of monster would complain about these details given the hilarious, dead-on cultural analysis, the lacertating appositive phrase in the first sentence, and the dazzling parallelism at the end of the second sentence. Who knew that "tightening" and "exploring" could join together so felicitously. Bravo, Erica!
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